Freestyle Verse

[12enegade]

hey just a freestyle I jotted down. let me know what you think of the flow

 

im free spittin sittin on a chair; i be hittin on this air

trippin with no care; livin on a dare

im about to clock out; before I shout out

liftin 50 pounds just to pull my cock out

then i'll pull my glock out

cause im a crazy motherf*cker get the drop out

before I lock and unload; hollows on your mums home

if you don't know that's usually the way a bout go

with me; i'll shoot the beef flip it like a burger

go about my business like I aint commit  a murder

that's the way the day usually ends and begins

with homicidal tendencies and plenty of them benjamins

but just because I got don't mean that I am spendin them

ima save up; ima get mine

you need to wake up; you need to get in line

you need less to f*ck around

and more to get beat

to the ground

while im watching from my high seat

looking down; hitting on some sweet

trickin on some treat; she makes a lot of sounds; but I don't hear her speak

im feelin kinda strong; yet im feelin kinda weak

I feel like somethings wrong; yet I feel like somethings right

I feel like ima god; I feel like I can feel the f*cking light

I feel like im the most high; I feel like im profound

I feel like ima die; I feel like ima drown

I feel like im fried; I feel like ima clown

born as a hustler; raised as a G

starving aritist livin on mustard

and all I smokes weed

you is just a buster; whereas my mind is freed

livin my life; puffin on them trees; and I roll my shit tight

I roll my shit fat; I like my bitch heavy

like wheres my bic at? someone bic'd me already

motherf*ckin prick n dirty susna' bitch

I need a f*ckin light; and I need it f*ckin quick

im tryna get high; and you f*ckin up my shit

get up out my sight; before I f*ckin flip

I wrote this on the fly; it'll be a f*ckin hit

like a plane crash I hope you die

nothin left to say so that's it

 

[Dhananjay M Venkatesh]

i don't know how to say this but...im not feeling anything with this. usually a freestyle is done for battles right, and if this was for a battle, or even if it isn't, a freestyle depends usually on punch-lines...i don't really see any above and also...these three lines dont sit well. 

"that's the way the day usually ends and begins

with homicidal tendencies and plenty of them benjamins

but just because I got don't mean that I am spendin them"

 

but on the whole, it's a good freestyle but i just, i can't feel a vibe to it

 

Peace