TOP DOG

[THEHOUND]

Pistol packin

triple hamburger stackin

don't think for a minute im slackin

its your f*ckin bags ill be packin

 

I am the man

the top dog

talk shit

you get rolled over like a log

 

I got the bling

gold chaines

diamond rings

huhh yeah

so much shit you never seen

you probably don't even know what the f*ck I mean

 

education time

teach you mother f*ckers how to rhyme

just to pass my time

 

in the local thug bar

im the only mother f*ckin star

dealers n pimps

they pay me the rents

just to walk my street

and im the mother f*cker you never wanna meet

 

double dealin

free wheelin

might be your wife and daughter I be steelin

and its there pussy I might be dealin

 

motherf*ckin pimp daddy

like my chicks tight

don't want no fatty

 

herion and hoes

all over these streets

everybody knows

find that shit

everywhere the wind blowes

lay down a line and suck that shit up your nose

 

aha la la

la laaa

huhh.haha...yeah

I like them bitches easy

but not cheesy

now get the f*ck on your knees and please me.....

 

Written by jesse w h loucks....THEHOUND

 

 

 

[JaySkathe]

Are you looking for feedback on this?

[THEHOUND]

sure...just put up for comments,etc

[Leupo Ishai]

seems kind of simple and rushed. there is an apparent lack of effort to it like a freestyle? not to say it's particularly bad because there is some potential. you just have to think these through more than just putting words that rhyme together down on paper. explore more rhyme schemes too you could improve even more with better structure. you can check my profile out and see if you like it. if you do, then feel free to message me and i'd be glad to see if we could put something together 

Edited November 28, 2015 by Leupo Ishai
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