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Lyrics Writing #9 - Including A Named Element


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Hi Gang

 

This challenge is to write some lyrics where you make use of either a CELEBRITY NAME, or a BRAND NAME OR BOTH.

 

Many songwriters have done this. In fact, once they are established as writers thet can get PAID to include brands , not celeb names as far as I know.

 

For example REM's line from "Sidewinder sleeps tonight",

 

"A can of beans or black-eyed peas, some Nescafe and ice

A candy bar, a falling star, or a reading from Doctor Seuss"

 

I belief the inclusion of Nescafé was an earner. I don't know about Doctor Seuss lol

 

Brands and names in general help make your song more memorable, more familiar. It helps people to identify with the lyrics or the character in the lyrics.

 

Have at it!

 

Cheers

 

John


 

 
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Well then I'm just gonna be a whore about it!  

Verse 1

You called me up one morning, my apple iphone rang,

I put my foldgers coffee down not ready for the pain,

You didn't want me anymore, and nothing could be done,

For I game on a PS4, and you like XBox 1,  

Some people think it's petty, some people think it's lame,

But like the 49ers, we take seriously this game,

 

Chorus  

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

 

Verse 2

I almost changed my mind for you, I started to concede,  

Until I heard of Fallout 5 now THAT is all I need,

I guess I'll kind of miss you, but I've still got distractions,

With all the games that Sony makes I can't miss all the action!

 

Chorus

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

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Hi, John.

 

I thought this was a repeat of a recent challenge involving elements until I scrolled down to read the new brief. Need to update the challenge title :)  ~T

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On 8/17/2017 at 11:49 AM, symphonious7 said:

Verse 1

You called me up one morning, my apple iphone rang,

I put my foldgers coffee down not ready for the pain,

You didn't want me anymore, and nothing could be done,

For I game on a PS4, and you like XBox 1,  

Some people think it's petty, some people think it's lame,

But like the 49ers, we take seriously this game,

 

Chorus  

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

 

Verse 2

I almost changed my mind for you, I started to concede,  

Until I heard of Fallout 5 now THAT is all I need,

I guess I'll kind of miss you, but I've still got distractions,

With all the games that Sony makes I can't miss all the action!

 

Chorus

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

 

Hi, Symphonious.

 

This is a branding bonanza! The 49rs lines could be cut to keep the verse length to 4 lines across verses without sacrificing the branding aspect.  I thought the XBox 1 bit was clever. You might even draw a bigger contrast there by not just saying that the other person likes gaming on an old system, but that they don't game at all, for example: I game on a PS4, you're not even XBox 1.

 

Overall this has a tragi-comedy feel to it--a commentary on how gaming can affect relationships. Funny and sad at the same time. Well done. ~T

 

 

 

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Just now, Timbre said:

 

Hi, Symphonious.

 

This is a branding bonanza! The 49rs lines could be cut to keep the verse length to 4 lines across verses without sacrificing the branding aspect.  I thought the XBox 1 bit was clever. You might even draw a bigger contrast there by not just saying that the other person likes gaming on an old system, but that they don't game at all, for example: I game on a PS4, you're not even XBox 1.

 

Overall this has a tragi-comedy feel to it--a commentary on how gaming can affect relationships. Funny and sad at the same time. Well done. ~T

 

 

 

Thanks! hahaha I was just trying to be funny really but yeah I can see how that would be an almost better spoof idea.  If it was about a guy who couldn't be with a girl because she's not a gamer, hehehe  appreciate it!

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4 hours ago, Timbre said:

Hi, John.

 

I thought this was a repeat of a recent challenge involving elements until I scrolled down to read the new brief. Need to update the challenge title :)  ~T

 

Never thought about that!

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Anyone else want to take part? Come on, you know you want to!

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Hi All,  I'm working on challenge but just had to. So this post is just for fun but it fits the named element 😎 . A friend and i wrote a few back, just goofing. 


All My Sisters Drank My Booze   


Sheesh you can't turn your back for a minute
Before you know it they're in it

Baileys in the pantry
Tecate in the 'frig         (Refrigerator)
Myers in the basement
And they only left a smidge

The local vodka decoy
Didn't fool too long
Found the private stash
As they broke into a song

Of course
The Mikes are Harder
16 ounces tall
But you can't leave an opened can
Or anything at all

All my sisters drank my booze
Smoked my ciggies too
What the hell am I gonna do

With my sisters

 

😁

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Thanks, Peggy. Nice bit of humor and wordplay to get the creative juices flowing for the rest of us. I have some choruses with no verses, but I still wanna play :) --so I'm working on it. ~T

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On 8/17/2017 at 10:49 AM, symphonious7 said:

Well then I'm just gonna be a whore about it!  

Verse 1

You called me up one morning, my apple iphone rang,

I put my foldgers coffee down not ready for the pain,

You didn't want me anymore, and nothing could be done,

For I game on a PS4, and you like XBox 1,  

Some people think it's petty, some people think it's lame,

But like the 49ers, we take seriously this game,

 

Chorus  

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

 

Verse 2

I almost changed my mind for you, I started to concede,  

Until I heard of Fallout 5 now THAT is all I need,

I guess I'll kind of miss you, but I've still got distractions,

With all the games that Sony makes I can't miss all the action!

 

Chorus

Maybe someday you'll come around, and finally see the light,

PS4 has got the games to fill you with delight,

I know I should see you as more important than a thing,

But just like Redbull honey PS4 can give me wings!!!  

 

This is really a fun one the way i read it. I have listened to your music and can almost hear you singing. I think i'm getting the pull you're creating like UNIX/Microsoft, cowboys/ eagle, repubilican/democrat haha.

 

"Some people think it's petty, some people think it's lame,

But like the 49ers, we take seriously this game"  hilarious!!

 

:)

Peggy

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Just now, Peggy said:

 

This is really a fun one the way i read it. I have listened to your music and can almost hear you singing. I think i'm getting the pull you're creating like UNIX/Microsoft, cowboys/ eagle, repubilican/democrat haha.

 

"Some people think it's petty, some people think it's lame,

But like the 49ers, we take seriously this game"  hilarious!!

 

:)

Peggy

Hehehe thanks Peggy, I'm glad it made you laugh!

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On 8/30/2017 at 2:08 AM, Skin said:

Thanks for your comment and it was fun and yes I actually do have a melody🙂

Gix'r/Gixxer = GSXR 1000cc blue n white one, my fav😛 I love speed n adrenalin🏍🏍🏍🏍🏍🏍 some things just get ya heart racing know what I mean?

 

I might tweek chorus just a tad🤔 Not much but a word or 2.

 

Thanks and I will post my rendition of this if I can get it right, voice only but maybe a drum beat as a backing.

 

Les 

I could totally hear it having a steppin wolf feel.  Definitely a cool like... love song to your bike, I can dig it 

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That is a killer Steppenwolf track, but the song I was thinking of when I was listening to his track was the one everyone knows...  

 

Hehehe now that I think about it, I may have just associated this song with motorcycles cause of easy rider and that's why...  but yeah @Skin this is the song I was thinking of when I was reading your lyric.  Now I gotta check out more Steppenwolf though, one of the few 60's bands I'm not too familiar with, and that track was killer! @tunesmithth!

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I can sooooo see that @Skin!  Almost makes me wanna write it, but nahhhhh lololol

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The only product I can recall name checking in a lyric is the VOX AC30 ... and I don't even use the word VOX, I only reference my 'AC30'

Gets a lot of blank looks from non-musos :)

Here are the lyrics:

 

DAMN ROCK AND ROLL

 

When I was young, I'd turn my radio on

And my Mom and Dad said, 'Listen son

There's better things for your time'

But those twelve bar blues, even then,

Had her claws in me, and my Mom and Dad said,

'It's time you stepped into line

And how do they call that music?'

 

'Rock and roll, its a sin

I can see it'll be the ruin of him

Damn rock and roll'

 

And at fifteen years I bought my first guitar

And my friends said. 'Some rock and roll star

You must be out of your mind'

And I flunked at school but I didn't care

Just practised hard on my six string

And turned up my AC 30

And how I love that music

 

Rock and roll, its so good

Can't kick it now its in my blood

Damn rock and roll

 

I get a little uneasy, get a little bit scared

Too much can be said with the crash of a chord

What are they trying to say?

And the prophecies echo through the heat of a riff

Just lost in my head what I won in the street

No, I wasn't told any lies

But don't you love that music

 

Rock and roll scars like a knife

Can't see it but it cuts inside

Damn rock and roll

 

Rock and roll, its so good

Can't kick it now its in my blood

Damn rock and roll

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That 9:99 deal will turn your frown upside down

follow the crowd (just do it) now    (NIKE)

be perfect earn a tick          (NIKE)

wear (three stripes) be a sergeant, serve a clown    (ADDIDAS)

go McDonald buy a happy meal, you'll be loving it  (MCDONALDS)

 

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