Rap / Hip Hop Contest

[john]

13 minutes ago, Leo said:

Hey,

 

Here it is,

Thanks for listening,

It's a very slow rap.

https://soundcloud.com/leosherman/water/s-oBZ2H

 

Water
Take me to the water, cleansing and free,
Out of the burning, air around me,
Stop this hurting, let me be,
I feel so cold, and old and weak,

 

The people they watch me, they don't know that it's hell,
They can't tell that I'm up here, with nothing to sell,
A mask of lies, I wear so well,
I feel so cold, and old and sad,

 

Off the attention, I sit silent in fear,
I know all this affection, will soon disappear,
The lights go out and, the night comes in,
I feel so cold, and old and thin,

 

Take me to the water, cleansing and free,
Take me out of the burning, air around me,
Stop this hurting, let me be free,
I feel so cold, and old and weak,

 

Take me to the water

 

Did you remove the track Leo?

[Leo]

2 minutes ago, john said:

 

Did you remove the track Leo?

Sorry about that,

Iv'e replaced it, not quickly enough...

 

Here's the true one:  https://soundcloud.com/leosherman/water/s-cNGGo

[john]

ah no problem.

 

[MonoStone]

7 hours ago, HoboSage said:

I downloaded the track just to steal it.

 

As expected... 

 

For that you have to enter the contest! Your name is down now.

[TheSylentType]

@Leo wowww great song almost feel embarrassed to drop mine  loved it! 

[TheSylentType]

 

Lyrics:

 

On a warm, clammy summer night

So many people on the streets

it really was a sight to see

Happy face smiling bright

Strolling through the city

A bit tipsy on the whiskey

Entered a new world

Where people welcome each other

So heartily the warmth radiates from their body

So dark your colour doesn't bother

It mixes in the air and everything gets foggy

Everybody was somebody and

Nobody was everybody

Tangled in a dynamic knot

Without any blank spot, the only blind spot

were our deceiving eyes witch polluted the clear skies.

 

Even the pole dancer took a rest

Snoozing off on the jazz rap

She could go home early

Take a nap and provide her nest

Her young borns happy to see her

And a daddy ready to please her

She had a great night

And only a quick stroll under the city light

The hours flew by detached from any observation

The night could be endless making us careless

Senseless for the horror and terror

We see it daily

It's actually an error in humanity

Exploited by the insanity turned autocracy

Finally the last call comes

The pole dancer long gone

Decided not to take it

And leave this heavenly place painted on a good memory

 

Turned in a dark alley

To turn a back to the vitality of the city life

Not in a hurry to get back to the wife

Knowing it was a bad neighborhood

After this experience there was only good

Feet walked on their own

Direction set to the blue lights

Breaching the bright night

Getting closer bodies distinguished

All shot down, so many lifes finished

Couldn't tell any colour or race

Nor did it matter when faced, with such a brutality

The scenery so slow paced it touched reality

It was unseen such an act of violence

Blood still dripping fresh

Through the holes made in human flesh

But this wasn't what made the stomach turn

It was the long brown hair and high heeled shoes

Of an innocent pole dancer hopes high to get home, but it was a lose

 

Every day has it's ups and downs

Like fighting in the rings all new rounds

For those who have it good:

One big playground

But those with bad luck get shot down

Every day has it's ups and downs

Like fighting in the rings all new rounds

For those who have it good:

One big playground

But those with bad luck get shot down

[Leo]

Hey Sylent, 

Thanks bud. 

I like the story in your lyrics.

Really works to me with the vibe of the song.

[MonoStone]

Anyone else entering this? 

[ALOPRODUCTIONZ]

me if im not already put down

[MonoStone]

5 minutes ago, ALOPRODUCTIONZ said:

me if im not already put down

 

Yep, you were first to post. So far I see 3 entries posted...so wondering whether there's more coming or we're done.

[john]

I didn't get time to finish up, so no entry from me

[john]

I have to say, I noticed some common issues amongst the entries. There are a few things that can be done that would bring benefits to all the rappers. It might be interesting to see what benefits a workshop or two would bring. Let me know if you guys would be interested.

[Richard Tracey]

On 01/03/2017 at 0:50 PM, ALOPRODUCTIONZ said:

Here's my attempt 

lyrics below

THIs FLOW IS uh

QUITE WELL DESIGNED

THERE'S MANY DIFFERENT WAYS IT CAN MOVE THROUGH TIME

LEMI PAINT A PICTURE FOR YOU WITH MY RHYMES
ONTO THE CANVAS OF YOUR MIND
IM INK LINED 
TO PORTAY THE BEUTY OF MY RYHMES 

 

I remember better times 
When our love, was still alive
Then i could see, Reflective gazes from your eyes
Together,  we would  Arise
Now tears are pouring, from my eyes

I see you falling through the skies
with my love, i gripped you tighty
and for a long time,i could pull you from his lies 
which makes me sad, to see you fall for his diguise
now i see you falling, through the skies

with my love, i gripped you tightly
and for a long time,i could pull you from his lies 
which makes me sad, to see you fall for his diguise
now i see you falling, through the skies

 

THIs FLOW IS uh

QUITE WELL DESIGNED

THERE'S MANY DIFFERENT WAYS IT CAN MOVE THROUGH TIME

LEMI PAINT A PICTURE FOR YOU WITH MY RHYMES
ONTO THE CANVAS OF YOUR MIND
IM INK LINED 
TO PORTAY THE BEUTY OF MY RYHMES 

INSIDE YOUR MIND
VISUALISE THE COLOURS MAGNETIZED

BOUNCING WITH THERYMES
CLING LISTENER

TO THE WORDS  I DELIVER
FLOWING THROUGH YOUR RADIO STREAM 
I BRING RHYTHM HUH 

iv got a newclear mind 
i can detonate ryhmes 
to explode radiating time
heatingup speeding up 
i wIll tear you up im a ripper
throw your bars in the bin like litter
 i am an exceptional spitter

i know 
there are sum

sum tell you not to smoke on a cigar

or sip pon to much liqor

but der nutting like me 

check it out check it out

switch the flow make you bounce

here the tale of the flame

being chased by the rain

thats blown by the wind 

singing songs to the earth

it burns to devour everything in its path

when controlled it can help every living thing live

 

THIs FLOW IS uh

QUITE WELL DESIGNED

THERE'S MANY DIFFERENT WAYS IT CAN MOVE THROUGH TIME

LEMI PAINT A PICTURE FOR YOU WITH MY RHYMES
ONTO THE CANVAS OF YOUR MIND
IM INK LINED 
TO PORTAY THE BEUTY OF MY RYHMES 

 

 

I like this has a kind of Faithless sound to it with a Maxi Jazz rap.

[MonoStone]

Ok the contest is finished.

 

I don't know whether this is meant to go to a vote, but I can't organise that as I didn't start the thread.

 

So...my choice -

 

Well, David and Leo are disqualified! Because this is a RAP contest. 

 

In my opinion, the best of the two runners, and the winner, is - ALOPRODUCTIONZ 

 

 

[ALOPRODUCTIONZ]

7 hours ago, john said:

I have to say, I noticed some common issues amongst the entries. There are a few things that can be done that would bring benefits to all the rappers. It might be interesting to see what benefits a workshop or two would bring. Let me know if you guys would be interested.

id be interested in a workshop bro

[ALOPRODUCTIONZ]

9 minutes ago, MonoStone said:

Ok the contest is finished.

 

I don't know whether this is meant to go to a vote, but I can't organise that as I didn't start the thread.

 

So...my choice -

 

Well, David and Leo are disqualified! Because this is a RAP contest. 

 

In my opinion, the best of the two runners, and the winner, is - ALOPRODUCTIONZ 

 

 

[Leo]

3 minutes ago, MonoStone said:

Ok the contest is finished.

 

I don't know whether this is meant to go to a vote, but I can't organise that as I didn't start the thread.

 

So...my choice -

 

Well, David and Leo are disqualified! Because this is a RAP contest. 

 

In my opinion, the best of the two runners, and the winner, is - ALOPRODUCTIONZ 

 

 

 

Fair enough, my vote goes twords ALOPRODUCTIONZ.

It's been a pleasure.

 

Can I put my take public on sound cloud with credits?

[Richard Tracey]

My vote would go to ALOPRODUCTIONZ as well. Really enjoyed that take on your song Dek. Well done ALO.

 

Now did everyone find this interesting? Would they be happy to do it again?

 

I started working on another track this morning to post up if anyone wanted to give it a try.... just let me know and we can set this up as another contest...Cheers.

 

Dek, are you still wanting to do your sung vocal version, as I think Leo and David are already there?

[ALOPRODUCTIONZ]

14 minutes ago, Richard Tracey said:

My vote would go to ALOPRODUCTIONZ as well. Really enjoyed that take on your song Dek. Well done ALO.

 

Now did everyone find this interesting? Would they be happy to do it again?

 

I started working on another track this morning to post up if anyone wanted to give it a try.... just let me know and we can set this up as another contest...Cheers.

 

Dek, are you still wanting to do your sung vocal version, as I think Leo and David are already there?

yeah man post it up bro

 

[MonoStone]

52 minutes ago, Richard Tracey said:

Dek, are you still wanting to do your sung vocal version, as I think Leo and David are already there?

 

Sure, if a few people want to enter sung versions. But I think it would be better to run it differently. 

 

1. Encourage people to edit the construction (as David did) if they need

2. Have a minimum number of entries before a winner is voted for, rather than a closing date.

 

 

Also, I'm happy for any SS member to use the music if they ask me first, credit me, and don't use it commercially. So it's not all about competition... I just really like hearing the different takes on top of my music. I'd like to encourage more of that... might find some cool young superstar to front my songs and I'll take a back seat while we get rich