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Hi James & Goldy, Thanks for the read and the comments It is about Kurt Cobain. I had to use wikipeda and google as my inspiration Maybe I need to make it clearer that it is about Kurt Cobain? As I said, I found this thougher than I expected! And yes I'm back again Been following the challenges and entries but there was to much going on in my life to be focused on the challenges.

That video is just bizar! There are strange people living on this planet I love the the way your lyric flows... While reading it I could picture it all in my mind. You have a good way with words Keep up the good work!

I don't know the person so I used google on her But without knowing who you're writing about I still can feel the emotions trough it. I like the both versions you wrote. The first version better cause I don't seem to understand everything in the 2nd version. But that's just me... Keep up the good work!

This challenge turned out to be thougher than I expected. Verse: I took champagne and 50 pills But dead won't take me in his arms so easily I guess he likes to play games He decides who succeed and who fails Verse: If they would ask I will deny It wasn't suicide I'm just bored of this life So I took another shot of joy I'm not a star but a lost boy Chorus: Welcome to club 27 Where you live hard and die young All about music, drugs, alcohol When the time was there I knew what had to be done Sealed my destiny with a gun Verse: The breath of madness in my neck Pullling the trigger without a single blink Without any single regret I blew a hole trough my head Chorus: Welcome to club 27 Where you live hard and die young All about music, drugs, alcohol When the time was there I knew what had to be done Sealed my destiny with a gun Chorus: Welcome to club 27 Where you live hard and die young All about music, drugs, alcohol When the time was there I knew what had to be done Sealed my destiny with a gun

Your mission, should you choose to accept it is to select someone, or something, that seemed unassailable, a household name, at their peak, and describe the cataclysmic turn of events that brought them low. I really don't understand this... can someone help me out?

First of all I love your tittle!! Verry original I like the 1st verse. Not sure about 'hollow eyes'. Hollow eyes don't show emotions in my opinion. Maybe 'black eyes' or 'furious eyes' just a suggestion. Like the 2nd verse as it is. The first line is a verry good idea Actually I like the rest of the lyric. You have a good chorus. The last line really makes it strong in my opinion. I really hear someone screaming 'no,no,no'. You really did an excelent job on describing what's going on in the picture Another lovely lyric of your hand as always!!

I know it isn't exlusively metal... but it's the first thing I think of when I see it 'cause I'm what they call a metalhead

Thanks for the read and your comments Goldy! I think I maybe misunderstood the challenge. I thought we had to write a lyric inspired by the image instead of writing what was going on in the picture. When I looked at the picture these 2 ideas for my lyrics came in mind. The fire and the 'metalhorns' captured my eyes. I will go deeper on your comments tomorrow. Don't have much time right now. I will also comment on your lyric than. But at first sight it's a good and strong one ;-)

The fire that burns within Verse: Inside this chaos I try to breath They all have their opinion Like they know where my road will lead Why does nobody seem to listen Verse: As I write my voice down on paper Will it all be loud enough Make them look up, see me as a creator A star beginning to rise above Chorus: I will follow my own path Set this world on fire As I step into the light You can call me a liar But this is my dream It's the flame that burns within Verse: This isn't the end, just the beginning I raise my hands to the sky I swear I won't stop until I'm winning Cause you all know that I Chorus: I will follow my own path Set this world on fire As I step into the light You can call me a liar But this is my dream It's the flame that burns within And I wrote another one: Metal heart Verse: I see their eyes following me Like I'm an evil witch Ready to be burned down at the stake Or to be throwed of the bridge Verse: They're labbeling me a sinner For being who I am Wearing band shirts and headbanging It's a part of being a metal fan Chorus: You can never break me down A metal heart beats strong As I stretch my arms to the sky Putting the horns up high Showing you I'm proud to be A member of this big family Verse: So we love loud and heavy music Kicking inside the moshpit Does it make us criminals Wouldn't you dance on a good beat Chorus: You can never break me down A metal heart beats strong As I stretch my arms to the sky Putting the horns up high Showing you I'm proud to be A member of this big family

Hi Kel, Thanks for the feedback, verry much apreciated! I changed the last line of the second verse to: Thoughts wear heavy in my head. Is that a better line? And you're right about the bridge. It's better if people can fill it in with their own experiences.

This one really made me laugh Where did you get the inspiration for this? I really want to see in your head sometimes... Would be a funny experience I think. As always a good write of you

I love the ending. I always love happy endings You did a really great job on the challenge. It doesn't bother me that their isn't a chorus. So don't worry about that!

Good job done on the challenge Such a positive song!! After reading it I feel so much power and energy going trough me.

Hi Goldy, Thanks for the compliment!!! And your suggestion for the bridge is a keeper for me.

After reading what Kel had I got inspiration some way. So here it is. Don't have alliterations in my bridge, is that a problem? Forgive me Verse: Lost, like leaves that linger through the street Wandering on the waves of the wind The air still smells so sweet It must be all in my mind Verse: Dreams of dead darken my days, night after night All alone I awake again in bed Can't turn this wrong to right These thoughts wear so heavy in my head Chorus: Forgive me for wanting One last kiss Forgive me for seeking A way to have what I miss Forgive me, forgive me I can't let go of this Verse: Running, round and round, retracing our steps But your figure fades so fast Maybe it is time to accept I must leave you in the past Chorus: Forgive me for wanting One last kiss Forgive me for seeking A way to have what I miss Forgive me, forgive me I can't let go of this Bridge: The car came, crashed so fast Were you in pain Did you cry before you passed I remember the last thing I said 'I love you forever, forever and beyond dead' Chorus: Forgive me for wanting One last kiss Forgive me for seeking A way to have what I miss Forgive me, forgive me I must let go of this

Wow Kel, pretty nice job done on this one!! Still stuck with just one verse. I really need to upgrade my vocabulary I think

Happy birthday from me to Kel!! I'm trying to write for the challenges but I'm bussy renovating my apartement.

Thanks Kel! I'll check it out tomorrow

Hi Iguzda, I'm sorry to hear that about your brother!! Cancer is such an ugly disease *virtualhug* I guess my parents will never understand... I just better let it be than to wind myself up about it. Wasted energy, right. A happy new year for you girl!! I wish you all the best Hi tunesmithth, It's not about proving something... it's just the fact that I thought they could be supportive for me for once in their live instead of breaking me down. They never gave me the chance to chase my dream. And that's what hurts. Most of my friends doesn't support me in this and I don't give a damn, 'cause it's my passion. But my parents, it's different for me than my friends opinions. If you know what I mean?

I'm from Belgium. Not so much nature and absolutely no friendly people!! The only thing that's keeping me here is my mom. She wouldn't survive if I moved to another country. I've visited Edinburgh one day. But me and my friends hired a cottage in Beauly (if you know that place) and from there we went to visit other places with the car. Was really an amazing journey My friends have been in Glasgow. But I bought an apartement that needed some renovations so I didn't had the money to go with them So still dreaming of going to there!! One of my number 1 places to visit on the list You can always go onto a forum from the band you love and there you can search for people who are living nearby? Just a suggestion Some of my 'gig-pals' I've met via internet. So why not you

Holidays should be fun and spending time with your family. For me it's work, work, work and pretending to be happy that I'm with my family. I'm just glad I'm spending new years eve with my friends. They're more family to me than my real one. I've been spending so much time learning to play 'Jingle Bells' on my guitar. I know it wasn't perfect (far from) but I played it for my family on Christmas eve. My sister was verry enthousiastic. Said I've learned a lot and it keeps getting better. And than my parents... saying that it was a useless waste of time and that in a few months I would be tired of it. When I was a little girl, 6-7 years old, I wanted to do music school and learn to play the guitar or drums. Got the same reaction from my parents back than. They never understood my love for music. Even now when I talk with my mom about my writing and the forum she seems to think that it's all a waste of time. And for my dad I'll never be good enough I guess. Just a hopeless dreamer that is never going to achieve something other than working in a store. So right now I can't seem to write anything 'cause I only hear my parents saying that it's a waste of time. Hopefully I will get my inspiration and drive back soon... Anyway wishing everyone happy holidays here! And a joyfull 2014

I'll put that on my places to visit list!

I always try to discover things on my own. But maybe I should check some youtube movies.

Thanks! I want to create a somelike ballad track thingy. Going to take ages to make this something good, but I'll get there

This is how far I've made it http://app.box.com/s/0k976trkcdey1awebxe8 A long way to go