Hi Rudi,
I'm going to do my best for this critique.
I'm not so into the technical stuff of writing (still learning all of it) but I give it a shot
It are just my thoughts and emotions on it! (and sorry for any spelling errors!)
So here I go!
The title:
I don't know what to expect if I read your title. That's verry good (imo)!
A listener wants to know what's behind the title. Is it about a model husband, is it about finding a model husband, ... You get the point It's a original title and I like it but it doesn't appear in your chorus.
You just use it once in your bridge. The song revolves around the girl, not around the model husband.
So why not pick a title that refers to the girl like 'Russian doll'?
It's still an original title that sets a listener to finding out more (imo).
The structure:
I always thought a bridge was at the end of a lyric.
So I was surprised finding it before verse 3. It's not a bad thing I guess, it just surprised me.
Theme and message:
It reminds me of the younger me.
If anything or anyone didn't do what I expected them to do I just totally freaked out.
I just began to shout, scream, throwing and smashing things. I just wanted to have some control over things and persons in my life because I was in a really bad place in my mind and life on that point.
So I get the message, loud and clear. And the 'husband' doesn't fit her expectations so she just pushes him away and he feels pretty useless than. It's a little bit like a sad lovestory.
But it's a message that people think about and they're going to read/listen again and again.
Or it least I have
Verses:
Every line has a rhyme into it. It reads really flowing and natural.
Lines 4 and 6 don't rhyme and are shorter. I find that a good thing so it isn't all the same troughout the verses. A little chance in between is good! It keeps the reading surprising and not boring.
A few words I didn't understand so I translated them. Nothing bad to you, that's just my lack of English grammar. But others that would listen to it and aren't so perfect in English as me would have the same problem.
I don't understand the last line in your 3 verse: She's in denial of her end.
Is she dying? Or am I missing something?
It's just not clear to me and leaves me with a confusing feeling after the read.
Pre-chorus and bridge:
The pre-chorus is short but strong. I like it, no need to change it for me.
The bridge: you bring something new to the song, so that's good.
You have the title in here. But a title must stand out for me out of the song and it doesn't here for me.
Chorus:
Maybe instead of 'she sulks, she spouts' 'she fight, she lies'
Sounds better to me and easyer to understand... it's just a suggestion. Keep it or leave it
So in general I like it a lot. Some troubles with some words but I know what they mean now so I've learned something again today
Maybe think over the tittle. But all the rest I like.
Maybe I oversee things that other people do see. But as said, I just lack some technical side of writing to critique everything. All I can do is my best.
Keep up the good work!! I enjoyed this one!