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Lucy In The Sky With Diamonds

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Six Blade Knife - Dire Straits

Raindrops Keep Falling On My Head - B.J. Thomas check out this cool verse But there's one thing I know The blues they send to meet me Won't defeat me, it won't be long Till happiness Steps up to greet me

Dance me to the children who are asking to be born Dance me through the curtains that our kisses have outworn Raise a tent of shelter now, though every thread is torn Dance me to the end of love copyright <a href="http://elyrics.net">http://elyrics.net</a>

Sorry to hear it

one thing about the blues, it sure makes you feel good sometimes. Twice is some cases, three times in others.

Care to clarify that remark?

She says that she don't love me, but when she does it's nice Says that she don't love me no, but she loves me oh so nice I tell ya I love that woman 'nuff, to marry her not once but twice

Oh yes it can. My friends all call me James, but I got another name Friends all call me James or LJ, but I got another name First wife calls me lazy, second one calls me lame

oops, got the name wrong, sorry guys

Why do that Les, when what you are about to write is better than anything you've ever written? Keep on writing, I can't wait to see what's next.

I do remember that humidity is an issue for your guitars and the hybrid neck should help with that. Looks like a nice guitar.

That does look nice, I went to their web site and read up on the model. I don't know if I missed it somewhere but have you played one and know how they feel and sound already? I think I even saw a site that sold kits to build your own. As much as that appeals to the tinkerer in me, I would feel more comfortable having one set up the way they described on the Flaxwood site.

ok, I think I see now. It appears you are writing with a mixture of how the lines lay in the melody. I can sing it now. Its D day, we've signed our love away Yeah its D day baby, we've signed our love away You've taken everything I own, Now I ain't got no place too stay

Les, the vernacular and expression are getting closer, but I'm not sure this is fitting in the 12 bar structure still. I mean, I don't know how you're singing the first two lines, but the last two lines fit nicely in with a 12 bar scheme. This is how I understand it, please someone correct me if I'm wrong because the last thing I'd want to do is misdirect Les here. I hear the downbeat where I have numbered. 1 2 3 4 3 4 1 2, 3, 4, 1, 2, 3, 4 = 4 bars You can take me to the water, 1, 2, you can't make me swim 1 2 3 4 2 3 4 1 2, 3, 4, 1, 2, 3, 4 = 4 bars Take me to the water lawd, 1, jus so you don't make me swim 1 2 3 4 1 2 3 4 1 2 3, 4, 1, 2, 3, 4 = 4 bars I'd sink faster than a crocodile, with a mouthful of Big Jim Having this as a basic structure, you can tap your hand on the desk or table or tap you foot while counting beats. I don't know much about it Les, although, when listening to blues, if the first two couplets repeat, I know I'm listening to some variation of the 12 bar blues style. In this case, above would be one A section, adding one more A section, and then a B section while paying attention to the refrain there to include the song title. In the song above, I might stick with the crocodile theme since it catches my eye/ear. A hook with an enormous bite. Somewhere along the lines of fear being a crocodile I suppose, or addiction, or some affliction which needs resolution you know. To me, the B section represents that resolution or solution in an AAB 12 bar song. Tom

It's kinda up to you about whether it qualifies les. If you're tapping your foot and it sits on top of it you're probably on the right track. Can you make the first two couplets questions? Its D-day we signed the papers How do I let her go its D-day we signed the papers How do I let her go and then answer the question judge says boy don't worry shes got the Camaro then like It's D-day got my freedom how do I make it last D-day got my freedom got my freedom at last she may have got the car boys that thing ain't got no gas talk about the blues, poor bastard goes through a divorce and still can't get rid of her. So that sets up the B section,. What's he going to do now? If I was him I'd start pushing.

I'm game, sounds like a great exercise! Don't Let 'Em Rock Your Roll Do you wanna know me woman Know what makes me blue Wanna know me woman Know what makes me blue That list goes on for miles, lord Just from missin you Ya' gotta raise my child woman Raise him up and strong Won't ya' raise my child, woman Raise him up and strong He don't know the world yet Try'n a do him wrong I'm up here in this jailhouse woman Time gonna take it's toll Up here in this jailhouse woman Damn sure take it's toll But don't let nobody rock my baby Don't let 'em rock your roll

Nice work everyone, congratulations Amy. Nice to see the level of participation and interest in the lyrics challenges, thanks to John for your ideas and encouragement in exploring and rewarding the craft. Nice interview as well Amy.

Still trying to shake lose what's waiting to come out. Just scribbles for now. Effortlessly Should I fall in love with a woman I know Who holds such power over me With an arm she can reach to the highest bough Pull the shade from the autumn tree Tossing the foggy veil around Over unknown roads and beneath Till the sun is up high o’re the rivers tail Swift and light through the afternoon sheath Stones cover more than the ground below Clouds ever dim cool the breeze Poorest of gales blow a good ship aground Willing lost souls to the sea Oh, but I’m falling in love, my love Falling in love with thee True is my heart caught defenseless all while Falling so effortlessly