Challenge #9 Celeb / Brand Inclusion

[john]

Hi Gang

Your mission this week, should you choose to accept it is to write some lyrics where you make use of either a celeb name, or a brand name or both. Many songwriters have done this. In fact, once they are established as writers thet can get PAID to include brands , not celeb names as far as I know. For example REM's line from "Sidewinder sleeps tonight",

"A can of beans or black-eyed peas, some Nescafe and ice

A candy bar, a falling star, or a reading from Doctor Seuss"

I belief the inclusion of Nescafé was an earner. I don't know about Doctor Seuss lol

Anyway, that is your mission.

Cheers

John

[Kel]

on to it....

[Kel]

Okay, I think I managed to find something to say....

 

Brand Names

 

I look so good in Ray Bans,

And all the girls agree

I can't walk down the road

Without them looking right at me!

And when I strut my Levis

I give those gals a thrill

And when I tip my Stetson

Well those gals would run uphill

 

I drive my new Ranchero

Down Rodeo Avenue

All the high class ladies

Turn and wave hello.

Sometimes I cruise up Sunset

Drinking Jim Beam with a Coke

I keep a big Havana close

In case I want a Smoke

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I'm checking out this Tissot

I really need to be on time

I signed a big fat contract

Now I'm wearing Calvin Klein.

I got Nikes by the dozen

But I don't even run no more

I got a fancy trainer

Teach Pilates at my door

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I think I feel like chillin'

Watch my mega LG screen

Play a little X-Box

Maybe call on Charlie Sheen

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

Edited August 12, 2013 by Kel

[goldylocks]

My contribution, to this weeks challenge.
 
 
Tabloid Boy
 
Verse:
 
You were just young
A little while ago
Singing on Youtube
Playing the piano
Now you're it
Pompous as can be
Strutting the Red Carpet
A celebrity
 
Verse:
 
Gucci sunglasses on
Cool as James Dean
Smiling at young girls
Making them scream
Fame has you reeling
You're a famous pop star
Your photo's in US
With a Gibson guitar

Chorus:

Tabloid Boy
You're Hot
Hot,
Hot
Paparazzi loves you
They want a shot
Shot
Shot
Of your big brown eyes
And your new tatoo
So they can sell it
To the Enquirer news

Verse:
 
The world's at your feet
You're a famous teen
A Nikon follows you
In your Ferrari dream
Just think what you can do
With the money you make
If you shared it with Care
You'd be ending heartache

Chorus:

Tabloid Boy
You're Hot
Hot
Hot
Paparazzi loves you
They want a shot
Shot
Shot
Of your big brown eyes
And your new tattoo
So they can sell it
To the Enquirer news



Repeat Chorus:

 

 

Edited October 31, 2013 by goldylocks

[Kel]

Hi Goldy,

 

Powerful message hidden in there, I like it. I like the use of repetition in the chorus.

 

Cheers,

Kel

[john]

Kel

This is an avertisers dream, more brands than you can shake a stick at. lol

 

Good fun post

 

Les

Maybe for the advertising agency, but less so for an individual advertiser where they want their brand to stand out. As a writer it can cause you an issue because say X Box won't pay as much as Sony? In that case you may have to find a way to work in Sony which could mean a word tweak... bear in mind that each tweak changes the lyrics that you have to sell to an advertiser. The more brands the more potential variations, so yes yet again it could be an advertiser's dream but it could be your nightmare lol

[goldylocks]

Okay, I think I managed to find something to say....

 

Brand Names

 

I look so good in Ray Bans,

And all the girls agree

I can't walk down the road

Without them looking right at me!

And when I strut my Levis

I give those gals a thrill

And when I tip my Stetson

Well those gals would run uphill

 

I drive my new Ranchero

Down Rodeo Avenue

All the high class ladies

Turn and wave hello.

Sometimes I cruise up Sunset

Drinking Jim Beam with a Coke

I keep a big Havana close

In case I want a Smoke

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I'm checking out this Tissot

I really need to be on time

I signed a big fat contract

Now I'm wearing Calvin Klein.

I got Nikes by the dozen

But I don't even run no more

I got a fancy trainer

Teach Pilates at my door

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I think I feel like chillin'

Watch my mega LG screen

Play a little X-Box

Maybe call on Charlie Sheen

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

Thanks Kel, I enjoyed yours too. I like the way you used the brands in your song, very original and clever fun lyrics. Had me smiling, because you described most Americans trying to live the celebrity life style with brands.  I also, appreciate you commenting on my Chorus, that's the favorite part of the song that I wrote.

 

 

Goldy            

[Lisa Gates]

Okay, I think I managed to find something to say....

 

Brand Names

 

I look so good in Ray Bans,

And all the girls agree

I can't walk down the road

Without them looking right at me!

And when I strut my Levis

I give those gals a thrill

And when I tip my Stetson

Well those gals would run uphill

 

I drive my new Ranchero

Down Rodeo Avenue

All the high class ladies

Turn and wave hello.

Sometimes I cruise up Sunset

Drinking Jim Beam with a Coke

I keep a big Havana close

In case I want a Smoke

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I'm checking out this Tissot

I really need to be on time

I signed a big fat contract

Now I'm wearing Calvin Klein.

I got Nikes by the dozen

But I don't even run no more

I got a fancy trainer

Teach Pilates at my door

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

 

I think I feel like chillin'

Watch my mega LG screen

Play a little X-Box

Maybe call on Charlie Sheen

 

I'm buying brand names

I'm buying brand names

I don't shop no more in Wal Mart

I made it big

I really did

I'm buying brand names

Please tell me you don't have Walmarts in Australia?!! ugh they are taking over the WORLD!!!

[Lisa Gates]

My contribution, to this weeks challenge.

 

 

Tabloid Boy

 

Verse:

 

You were just young

A little while ago

Singing on Youtube

Playing the piano

Now you're it

Pompous as can be

Strutting Red Carpet

A celebrity

 

Verse:

 

Gucci sunglasses on

Cool as James Dean

Smiling at young girls

Making them scream

Fame has you reeling

You're a famous pop star

Your photo's in US

Holding a Gibson guitar

Chorus:

Tabloid Boy

You're Hot

Hot,

Hot

Paparazzi loves you

They want to get

A Shot

Shot

Shot

Of your big brown eyes

And your new tatoo

So they can sell it

To the Enquirer news

Verse:

 

The world's at your feet

You're a famous teen

A Nikon follows you

In your Ferrari machine

Just think what you can do

With the money you make

If you shared it with Care

You'd be ending heartache

Chorus:

Tabloid Boy

You're Hot

Hot

Hot

Paparazzi loves you

They want to get

A Shot

Shot

Shot

Of your big brown eyes

And your new tattoo

So they can sell it

To the Enquirer news

Repeat Chorus:

Hi Goldy,

I just have to wonder whoooo this song is about?!! Ha Ha Ha Did he really get a tattoo? I'm behind on Enews.

Good one! Your rhymes are realling flowing in this lyric.

Lisa

[Kel]

Please tell me you don't have Walmarts in Australia?!! ugh they are taking over the WORLD!!!

 

No we don't have Walmart, but K-Mart is here, and Target. Though in polite society, the latter boutique is pronounced Tah-zhay! Funnily, they are in opposition to each other but owned by the same parent firm. We don't have monopoly laws like you do in US.

 

I just pictured this clown driving around Venice Beach and Beverly Hills spending all his "new money" on brand names when he is more accustomed to Walmart. I figured even countries that don't have Walmarts will have a pretty good idea of the type of store it is, from the American Pop Culture we all have access to.

 

I must say, I had a heap of fun writing it!

 

I was imagining a film clip and everything just came together. It's probably not the inclusion John had in mind, but it's Kelish!

 

Cheers,

Kel

[john]

Sure Kel, though so many brands usually feature in comedic songs, or at least tongue in cheek. There must be a direct correlation to numbers of brands used? Lol I'm glad to see you got into the spirit of things. As I said you would have the benefits and problems I mentioned.

One thing to note is that brands don't like it if it's something that makes their brand look bad and may even try and stop you using their name in a song.

Using brands in the negative sense, such as attacking a brand, can be very useful in a viral way. Useful to you that is, and of course their competition. You may even be able to source funding from the brand's competition. You never know unless you try!

One of the most successful anti- brand songs in recent years was "United Breaks Guitars"

After the success of that the band were on a roll...

And

And to milk it further...

As David Carroll pointed out he also got two Taylor guitars out of it lol some good PR by Taylor there. That's a case of one brand doing well, being shown the love, while another brand suffers. Such is life!

[john]

Ps just look at the video YouTube views numbers

[goldylocks]

Hi Goldy,

I just have to wonder whoooo this song is about?!! Ha Ha Ha Did he really get a tattoo? I'm behind on Enews.

Good one! Your rhymes are realling flowing in this lyric.

Lisa

Yeah. this song is about the Beiber, thought I could fool you, not! 

 

 

 

Goldy          

[Lisa Gates]

Yeah. this song is about the Beiber, thought I could fool you, not! 

 

 

 

Goldy          

I liked it that I thought I knew but wasn't sure...sign of a good writer! Oh and that Les knew too! Good one!

[Lisa Gates]

No we don't have Walmart, but K-Mart is here, and Target. Though in polite society, the latter boutique is pronounced Tah-zhay! Funnily, they are in opposition to each other but owned by the same parent firm. We don't have monopoly laws like you do in US.

 

I just pictured this clown driving around Venice Beach and Beverly Hills spending all his "new money" on brand names when he is more accustomed to Walmart. I figured even countries that don't have Walmarts will have a pretty good idea of the type of store it is, from the American Pop Culture we all have access to.

 

I must say, I had a heap of fun writing it!

 

I was imagining a film clip and everything just came together. It's probably not the inclusion John had in mind, but it's Kelish!

 

Cheers,

Kel

I get it, no Walmart! thank God! Can I come live there? I am apaulled at the monopolies here.  eh...land of the free they say... Oh and we call Target Tah jay (with a french accent!)

[Lisa Gates]

I feel this is pretty weak but I can't get it out of my head so I'm giving it to you all!

 

 

You and Me by Lisa M. Guzda

 

Here we are you and me

In the best years that we’ve seen

The kids have all grown

And moved out on their own

 

Working days are all through

We’ve got better things to do

Drinking at the pool

The best way to stay cool

 

Wait, you can’t be serious

You are not mysterious

There are three of us here

You are making it so clear

Now it’s you and me

Your I-phone makes it three

 

It’s such a lovely day

We should make it go our way

Who are you texting

You said you were resting

 

Chorus

 

Bridge:

Now I see how it’s addicting

You have the power in your hand

I’m headed to the mall

Going to the I-phone stand

 

Now I am serious

And yes so mysterious

There are four of us now

Getting through to you somehow

Now it’s us and them

I-phones brought us together again

[Kel]

I feel this is pretty weak but I can't get it out of my head so I'm giving it to you all!

 

 

You and Me by Lisa M. Guzda

 

Here we are you and me

In the best years that we’ve seen

The kids have all grown

And moved out on their own

 

Working days are all through

We’ve got better things to do

Drinking at by the pool

The best way to stay cool

 

Wait, you can’t be serious

You are not mysterious

There are three of us here

You are making it so clear

Now it’s you and me

Your I-phone makes it three

 

It’s such a lovely day

We should make it go our way

Who are you texting

You said you were resting

 

Chorus

 

Bridge:

Now I see how it’s addicting

You have the power in your hand

I’m headed to the mall

Going to the I-phone stand

 

Now I am serious

And yes so mysterious

There are four of us now

Getting through to you somehow

Now it’s us and them

I-phones brought us together again

Hi Lisa

 

I like the different take on the classic love triangle. 

 

I feel that there are a few words you can remove without losing the story, and improving the flow in the process. These words are "add" words (not a tekinikal term) . As an example: "In the main, we all have our dreams." There are several ways this sentence can be shortened without changing the meaning. 

 

• We all have dreams
• In the main, we all have dreams
• In the main, we have our dreams

I think the first rhyme in the second verse is weak: serious/mysterious seems contrived to me. Although you do use "mysterious" again later in the story so perhaps it's just me.

 

Cool story though.

Kel

[goldylocks]

I feel this is pretty weak but I can't get it out of my head so I'm giving it to you all!

 

 

You and Me by Lisa M. Guzda

 

Here we are you and me

In the best years that we’ve seen

The kids have all grown

And moved out on their own

 

Working days are all through

We’ve got better things to do

Drinking at the pool

The best way to stay cool

 

Wait, you can’t be serious

You are not mysterious

There are three of us here

You are making it so clear

Now it’s you and me

Your I-phone makes it three

 

It’s such a lovely day

We should make it go our way

Who are you texting

You said you were resting

 

Chorus

 

Bridge:

Now I see how it’s addicting

You have the power in your hand

I’m headed to the mall

Going to the I-phone stand

 

Now I am serious

And yes so mysterious

There are four of us now

Getting through to you somehow

Now it’s us and them

I-phones brought us together again

I think you have a pretty good foundation, but could add a few more brands, like in this verse: Suggestion: for two verses. Just a few suggestions, to try and help.

 

Working days are all through

We’ve got better things to do

Drinking Lipton by the pool  Kel's suggestion (by)

The best way to stay cool

 

It’s such a lovely day

McDonalds makes it go our way

Who are you texting

You said you were resting

 

 

Goldy          

Edited August 13, 2013 by goldylocks

[Kel]

Hey Les, since when did Kermit play a guitar? He's a banjo frog!

K

[Kel]

LOL Kel, as much as I like kermy he's not the one. I do know a rude joke about him though lol. not for on here.

 

I like animal, man he can bang those skins!

 

A question for ya, what is the best way to extend a word in a song when you write it? e.g., I looovvvvvvvveeee you blah blah, nothing personal here lol. seriously use ..... or ------? i always have questions for you dont I.

 

well, its good night from him! and its good night from...........

 

Les

I don't usually bother with any special way of writing things. I usually hear a melody as I write the lyrics and don't need to elongate words as a rule. Sometimes I might repeat an ooh or an ahh... song I've just written has an oh oh oh oh.... where each oh is on a different note, but that's as far as I go. If I want to use two or more tones for a single syllable I'll write it like "Do-oo-oo..."

 

Not sure if that's what you were after but that's how I do it.

 

Kel

 

We we-nt do-ow-own to the ri-i-ver,

And we had our selves a swi-i-im in the cool, cool water,,,

 

Ok I might do things like that too...

Edited August 14, 2013 by Kel