Keep Dreaming

[LyricallyGifted]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IykuFXaK9zs

 

 

Fist Verse to My first Single

Hope you guys can really help me out with this one !

 

Dreams

 

 

(0:23)

can i kick it? can i bump to the rythm

spittin something a little different ?

do i need premission to , kick it to the children who

are driftin through thinking they should be gifted too

and lift them to , a new plautou just to let them know

that even tho the worlds looking kinda rough

sometimes the stars are looking up at us

and as the wolrd turns , so do we so dont be ,

so quick to judge, and on your journey for your dreams

dont forget to love.

cause she has hers and he has his

all meant to shine like little f*ckin kids (0:51)

But we keep trading in , our dreams for wages and bids

and im getting f*ckin pissed

Cuz We need to stay true to the dreams of our youth

cuz when tomorrow come you will still be you

So Try to keep dreaming without hitting snooze

So lemme hear you sing it , Cuz i know youve got the tools ! (1:08)

 

 

LyricallyGifted AKA Unknown

[Dhananjay M Venkatesh]

i love where this is going man

[LyricallyGifted]

Thanks man

[jacqhp]

Hey ot flows better. What did you change? Was it the word who? Or did you put in commas differently? I like it .Great job

[jacqhp]

I m not sure what you are meaning when you say kick it to the children who. It sounds like kick it to , means to me , kick them to the curb , but the surrounding sentence makes me think that is not what you mean . I think you are wanting to imply, kickin it with, the children who.Also because everyone is gifted on there own unique way, the part where it says , "thinkin they should be gifted too, might be re worded somehow, a suggestion , maybe say thinkin there game is smooth or there being true or something other than thinking they should be gifted, cause again, everyone is gifted. O thonk this is a postive message you want to express and i like that idea

[Leupo Ishai]

I love the idea of this piece. It could probably use some tweaking to make it flow a little bit. Take a look at the structure and i'm sure you can improve and provide a more smooth deliverance, but I really like where it's going.