Lady Of Mortality

[goldylocks]

She is waiting in time's shadow
Wrapped in night's whisper 
Fever crowns her head with fire
She wears illness as her garment 
Heartache is her design 
Her soulless eyes reflect  
Absence of life 
Her mouth draws breath 
Leaving emptiness 
She lifts life's veil  
Death embraces sorrow 
Flowers blanket stone memories 
Grief weeps to an orchestra of pain

 

 

Edited October 31, 2013 by goldylocks

[Scarpello]

Fricken awesome!!!! What a great piece...what a great great description... I can't say enough of how much I enjoyed this:)

Scarpello

[goldylocks]

Hey thanks Scarpello, I wrote this when I was dying with a deadly disease. I saw this vision of a fiery woman when I was drugged and ready for surgery.

 

 

 

Summer

[MPerry]

Goldylocks

 

You are amazing!!....taking me to a much higher place!!!..simply brilliant..I am glad to know you...as a fellow writer!!..regards, MIke

[goldylocks]

Mike, your pretty amazing yourself. Your writing is deep and imaginative. Full of emotion and passion.

 

 

 

Your writing friend

 

Goldylocks          

[MPerry]

Goldylocks...Thanks!!...cheers to our mutual admiration club!!...regards, Mike

[benjo]

HEY GOLDYLOCKS,

 

i like this got my mind working

well worked piece would maybe liked to have seen more of it

great...

[scotsman89]

yes works the mind liked it . deep. deep.

scotsman

[Matt Kerridge]

I really do love this piece. Keep it up!

 

Regards,

 

Matthew

[Odin]

this is one of the best written bits i have found on here, nice and simple, with a good use of words and vocabulary, you seem to have captured the grim reaper at work, and then bottled him up for every body to see

 and to top that you have done it without coming accross as overbearing or pertentious, something i struggle with, anyway 10/10  on this one,  it reminds me a lot of jim morrisons frequent trips to the other side, well done!

[cassidyjames]

A very haunting portrayal of Lady Death. Beautiful, sad and poignant. I love the line 'flowers blanket stone memories', creates the perfect visual of flowers at a grave. Really creative and well written

[goldylocks]

A very haunting portrayal of Lady Death. Beautiful, sad and poignant. I love the line 'flowers blanket stone memories', creates the perfect visual of flowers at a grave. Really creative and well written

Thank you everybody for your input. This is one of my favorite poems on the beautiful dark side. I wrote this when I was diagnosed with a terminal illness and had such a high fever 105 and I saw this vision in my mind of this haunting creature..

 

Goldy        

[Musicislife]

Write more, write a full song!

[Itsy Bitsy]

gave me chills, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this short poem it was an excellent depiction of lady death.

[goldylocks]

Thank you everybody, for your encouraging remarks.

 

Goldy