I don't know who gave your topic a 1 star vote. I gave it 4 to even it out a bit. People have an uneducated, bigoted view on the rap genre. It's been put in a bad light for the longest time because it was adopted by so many crooked guys as their musical outlet of choice, but that doesn't make the genre any less of an art form than the rest of them, it's just been given a bad rap (pun intended).
As for your flow, I personally think your imagery and emotion improves into your 2nd verse but then slightly loses it's way in your 3rd. A strong final verse (in this case your 3rd) benefits by making a strong final statement before leading back into the final chorus, and maybe I'm simply ignorant of some significance you've placed on the Orion Nebula, but it's just got me scratching my head rather than nodding it. Is there also some significance to the number 1065, or is it just convenient for your rhyme scheme (which is a perfectly fine reason for using it)?
Shining a light on what I enjoyed: "finished up everything that started - from teensy things, im weeping so heartily - all i wanted was a good friend
but in the end, you were a con man" <------ Dig this.
"GET OUTTA MY STORAGE - SLOWING DOWN ALL MY ORGANS - AIN'T SORTED BUT DISTORTED" <--- REALLY dig this.
"LETS ZOOM BACK IN TIME - BACK IN TIME TO THE LABS I BELONGED TO - GREW UP TO BE PERHAPS EXPERIMENTED WITH - THREW UP A COUPLE OF FILAMENTS BUT STILL IN - A POSITION OF NOT BEING SEALED IN" <--- Also dig.
My biggest and simplest suggestion for working on your material is to describe the problem(s) and solution(s) rather than just rant about them. Anyone can yell about what's wrong with everything. Share with and convince people why it's wrong and what's to be done about it, and you have yourself an audience. Hope this two cents helps!