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First of all welcome to the forum, Relucopo. I think you have some very creative images , unfortunately for me they don't connect well to represent the picture image for the Challenge. Examples given above.in blue. Goldy .

Vagda, I think your first song relates well to the male standing defiantly signing the crowd. It has good descriptive imagery. With a few tweaks it will be very good! As always your writing brings strong emotion and you express yourself well! Goldy

Satan's Got the Show Verse: Furious eyes shoot anger Haunted by glaring light Orange, blazing fingers Torch the black night Verse: Demons of Pyromania Scramble far and near Hearing crackling sounds It's music to their ears Chorus Satan's got the show See the flames grow Can't put the fire out No, no, no Satan's got the show See the flames glow Can't put the fire out No, no, no Bridge: "You can go straight to Hell" A rioter screams out loud He signs the Devil's horns Wildly mocking the crowd Chorus: Satan's got the show See the flames grow Can't put the fire out No, no, no Satan's got the show See the flames glow Can't put the fire out No, no, no Ending Outro Can't put the fire out Satan's got the show

Thanks Les, I hope your job hunting is successful. Whoever hires you will be lucky to have a committed person like you! Goldy

Yeah, I really missed the mark! I don't drink, so I totally missed the meaning. I thought you were referring to room mates, that's why I was referring to Olson Wilson and Ben Stiller, now I see it's not so funny. Sorry Kel. Duh, it went over my head. Goldy

Welcome to the forum, Loyd, I see you have a good sense of humor! I like it, just needs more lyrics and it has the potential to be a very funny song. Goldy

Why I see it as hilarious, is I can imagine Jack moves in and he's alright but Johnnie moves in and lets the, dishes and laundry pile up, because he doesn't want to be the house wife. So the men end up arguing, and he leaves, then Jim the next guy moves in, and everyone gets on each others nerves, fighting over the remote control, and so on, kind of like a revolving door, .The chorus is what made me think that way. It kind of refers the men couldn't stand living with each other, except for Jack. I thought it was very humorous! Goldy Jack moved in when you moved out And it looks like he's here to stay. Johnnie came and went again, Jim could only take me half way, When the Captain couldn't set me free There was nothin else I could do, Jack has been taking good care of me In a forty ounce dose of gettin' over you.

Thanks Kel, for the lovely compliment! I saw Number One Girl in my mind's eye and wrote it as I saw her. A beautiful black race horse, blue ribbon winner! Goldy

Kel, this is hilarious, this something I could picture Toby Keith singing or even could be a song for a movie with Owen Wilson and Vince Vaughn, Ben Stiller in the cast.. Very original, I laughed so hard when I listened to it. Is that you singing the demo? I noticed the singer has an accent. A+ Goldy

Thought I'd write something different, this time about a horse, an animal I think is magnificent! Number One Girl Verse: She was a little filly With wobbly knees Chasing yellow butterflies Flying in the breeze Verse: Now she's grown up Into a graceful mare With a shiny, black coat Eating grass without care Chorus: Number One Girl A blue ribbon queen Flying down the track Like a racing machine Her hooves thunder As they hit the ground Pushing her ahead Of every horse around Verse: She'd prance and whine At the starting gate When they fired the gun She'd never hesitate Chorus: Number One Girl A blue ribbon queen Flying down the track Like a racing machine Her hooves thunder As they hit the ground Pushing her ahead Of every horse around Verse: Many years have passed I still see her brown eyes Now, she's in Heaven Racing through the skies Ending Chorus Number One Girl At night can be seen Racing across the stars A blue ribbon queen Goldy

Thanks Kel, for your keen observation, and nice comments I changed it to died. I get my tenses mixed up all the time, it gets so confusing sometimes. Also, as I said to Vagda, I wanted to write something positive that would lift people's spirits up! Goldy

Thanks Vagda, for the nice comments. I wanted to write something with a positive message, about caring about other people. That in fact, we should be our brothers keeper! Goldy

Les, you did exactly what a song is suppose to do, tell a story. The first verse you describe Willy and draw us in with your love for the dog. The next verse you hold us captive with what's going to happen to Willy after he bites Billy Bob's child. The next 2 verses you build the suspense as to what course of action your going to take. The final 2 verses you charm us with your sense of humor and delightful ending of the song! Very well written, I would say it's a humorous Children's song in my opinion. Great Job! It made me laugh and I loved it! Goldy

Vagda, this is sad, but lovely and, very well written with a lot of emotional projection. Your song gave a picture of someone tormented with grief who lost a lover in a car crash. This is one of your best! One nit I had was the two last lines in the bridge in blue above marked in the lyrics. Still a moving and beautiful song! Goldy

Kel, the older you get, you're like an aged bottle of wine. Pouring yourself out into your writing! Terrific song, I loved the clever humor and lyrics. Especially the second and last verse. Great Job! Goldy

Here is my effort Live in the Moment Verse: I'm whirling in the wind with life Embracing every exciting day Blowing away clouds of sorrow Lady love is leading the way Verse: Tame thoughts teach me peace When panic pushes problems near I'm treading on my faith Holding my head above fear Chorus: I'm making my life count Before my last breath I live in the moment I live in the moment Before I'm laid to rest Tomorrow is unpredictable Like a red rose fading away I live in the moment I live in the moment I'm living for today Verse: My sunny smile shines in the world On all the people who pass me by I hold the hurting hand of someone Wiping tears away from their eyes Bridge: When I look back at time I wont be sad or even sigh I'll remember all those years I made a difference before I died Chorus: I'm making my life count Before my last breath I live in the moment I live in the moment Before I'm laid to rest Tomorrow is unpredictable Like a red rose fading away I live in the moment I live in the moment I'm living for today Goldy

Been quite ill, Just stopped by for a minute to wish Kel a HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!! Goldy

I found this to be difficult, but challenging, so I went for it. Any suggestions are appreciated. Redemption Song Him I thought I 'd make a comeback I miss the lights, flashing our name Memories of you and me together Not the songs that brought us fame Her Why do you think I'd work with you ? You left town for a better fate When you sang, you were never on time Your womanizing, made you late Him I took the wrong fork in the road Open your heart, give us one more try Remember how we harmonized? Fans were screaming, for you and I Him Let's sing together, do you remember when? Her Yeah, when you deserted me and our friends Him I lost my mind, liquor caused me to drown Her What if you drink again, and pull me down? Him Didn't you read, how I crashed and nearly died Her So, you've changed and now you're gonna' try? Him The Lord saved me, just wait and you'll see Her I forgive you, but I know there's no guarantee Him We'll sing a redemption song, you and me Him Sing about faith and bring em' to their knees Him With you standing by my side we'll both be strong Him We'll talk about forgiving in our redemption song Her We'll tell em' it's their soul they could lose Her They 'll think twice before they choose Her Tell em' to walk the straight and narrow way Her Look up to Heaven, if they think they'll stray Chorus Together Repeat 2X Will sing a redemption song you and me About a God who died to set us free Tell em' to love and forgive everyone Seek the Father and His only Son Love your neighbor the best you can And give the poor a helping hand Will sing a redemption song you and me About a God who who died to set us free Goldy

Thanks everybody, for your encouragement. #1,was nice while it lasted, for 2 days. Oh, well, see what I mean about fame being a hard road. Lol. The road just took a detour down to 3. "C'est la vie! Goldy

Thank you all for being so supportive! That's why I love Songstuff's Lyric Challenge. Goldy .

Hey everybody, not to brag but my songs have put me in #1 in Phoenix Arizona, for Christian Rock. I know it won't last. But, it sure feels good! Her'es the link! My name is Into the Light. http://www.reverbnation.com/main/charts?artist_id=3448914&genre=Christian%20Rock&genre_geo=Local Thanks John, and all the rest of you, it's because of the challenges! Goldy

Okay Kel, I'm going to make a few comments, . I like both your songs, I think they're fresh teen pop type lyrics. The second one seems more mature than the first one, a coming of age song, is what I mean. Justine recognizes the worth of the very beloved man Mandela and inspires to be like him. I can see the transition, from girl to more of a woman. Nice touch! Goldy Just a Tool I see you struttin' round town In your backward cap, Acting as if you're a real cool cat. But I know better, You're just a scared little boy Yeah, it's just an act, Yeah, that's a fact. You got your entourage But you don't have me, And now you know that you never will. And I know somethin' You don't want your fans to know Yeah, but you can chill Yeah, wait until... RAP I update my status and you're out in the cold I found a real man and the truth be told He's way better lookin' and he's got some moves, He's in his own class yeah the man is smooth. We saw you spit on your fans Boy that ain't so cool And nobody now will even follow you. And I know somethin' And the world will soon know it too, Yeah, you is just a fool/did you mean is or is it a typo? You're sounds better, unless your a home', lol. Yeah, just a tool. Obviously, the "event" is the infamous spitting on his fans incident that one Canadian teenage pop "star" seems to think is a great way to act, and maybe he is also the tool? Oh, and Justine obviously has a new beau... 　 Remembered I saw the news today Told of a great man passing I want to be remembered that way. All I do is sing Don't fix anything How can I be remembered that way? As I walk on the stage I beam my sweetest smile I want to be remembered this way. When I start my show Everybody knows How can I be remembered this way? RAP I know you're there and always will be By my side ready to support me I want to leave a legacy That's greatest than the world has seen... And in the news today A singer tries to change the world. How I want to be remembered this way. All I do is sing My music has to bring A way for me to be remembered this way. Nelson Mandela's passing is the event as you probably guessed, and in this one Justine is expressing her wish to be remembered as he is. And hopefully she will choose this song to do it... Quote MultiQuote

Thanks Kel, for your comments, I changed it to Red Carpet Ball. I believe that's 10 syllables. I used the syllable counter for the other one too, but I guess it doesn't include MTV. I also changed the title, you always keep me on my toes and I appreciate it, Goldy

My first song,. Unstoppable Verse When I saw you at the Red Carpet ball I was lost in your blue, blue eyes You smiled and winked at me My feelings took me over by surprise My face began to flush, turning bright red Like a school girl with her first crush I felt my heart flutter Blood ran all through my veins in such a rush Chorus Unstoppable Yes,unstoppable I'm falling I'm trapped, Like a bird in a snare There's no way out of this When I close my eyes I can taste our first kiss Verse: Even, Obama wants to hear you sing Dressed up in your famous disguise But all I want to know Is if your really a sincere guy Chorus: Unstoppable Yes, unstoppable I'm falling I'm trapped Like a bird in a snare There's no way out of this When I close my eyes I can taste our first kiss Rap Your more to me than a boy that's only just a flirt If you know my secret I'm afraid that I'll get hurt It's unstoppable and I'll have to take chance with you You dazzle me like a star, there's nothing I can do Goldy Second song Fames a Hard Ride I read about famous ones like me Overwhelmed with wrong desires Teenagers who committed suicide Let drugs consume them up like fire That's why I want you to be in my life I can't sing in the light alone If temptation knocks at my door It won't find me all on my own Fames a hard ride It drives you out of reality Takes you to a life of luxury You climb false stairs Leading to a downfall Falling in a deep hole While money robs your soul Fames a hard ride I wish I could tell you just how I feel Chills run up and down on my spine I see your face in the tabloids I dream about making you mine. Fame's a hard ride It drives you out of reality Takes you to a life of luxury You climb false stairs Leading to a downfall Falling a deep hole While money robs your soul Fames a hard ride Rap Even though we both are on the same fame ride We can help each other standing side by side Keeping ourselves balanced talking every day Then life doesn't have to sweep us both away Goldy

John, what's next? Goldy