RyanneLaRaye

Thanks for your suggestions.

Thanks scotsman. Yes, V2 should be four lines. I'm leaving your versus the because it is how the song sounds the fire is a contagious agent in the song Like it is everywhere. all consuming. There are four rolls. It is supposed to be like : "STOP! DROP! ROLL.... roll, roll, roll ya windows down..." THAT fire! THIS fire! It'll burn down ya whole damn town!" I should have written it that way to begin with for emphasis reasons. Sorry

I appreciate it! Thanks!

Thanks for the critique

I guess maybe it has to do with how you read it. It has more of a poppy/hip hop vibe. I wasn't necessarily going for a rap sound. That will come later. If you read verse 1 and then verse 2, It makes more sense I think. Either way, thanks for the critique. peace to you as well.

I think if you did use more commas or split it up a little more, it is easier for your audience to catch the vibe. Like maybe write it how you would spit it, you know?

Burning Like a Fire May 22, 2014 at 4:50pm PublicFriendsFriends except AcquaintancesOnly MeCustomClose FriendsLimited ProfileSee all lists...Dockside Bar & GrillWoody's Frat HouseBellevue Independant and Assisted LivingWoody's Frat HouseVirginia Health and Rehabilitation CenterRennes Health and Rehab CenterAthelstane, Wisconsin AreaWCTC - Waukesha County Technical CollegeAvonGreen Bay West High SchoolWaukesha, Wisconsin AreaKirkwood Community CollegeFamilyRennes Health and Rehab CenterCrivitz, Wisconsin AreaAcquaintancesGo Back verse 1: You don’t know the story, if you have only heard one side. You can say you aren’t one to judge, but your eyes reveal your lies. Don’t look at me like that, you are no better than me. I am not a bad person because I set my burdens free. Chorus 1: I am burning like a fire that will be burning for days, You will feel my heat, you will be blinded by my haze. I am burning like a fire, go get your fire trucks, Because I am burning like a fire that doesn’t give no f*ck. Verse 2: I loved him for forever…. Until that day came. He couldn’t decide whether or not he wanted to give me his name. He was so caught up in him, so caught up in his Fame, that it didn’t matter If I went or if I ever came. Chorus 2: I will be burning like that fire, I am so out of control, Please! try to put me out…you better stop, drop, and roll. Roll, roll, roll, your windows down. That fire! This fire! It’ll burn down ya whole damn town. bridge or verse 3: Keep riding by, ya better zip up ya fly, This fire so hot, this smoke so thick, You’re going to wish you were high, you’ll be getting high quick. Chorus 1: I am burning like a fire that will be burning for days, You will feel my heat, you will be blinded by my haze. I am burning like a fire, go get your fire trucks, Because I am burning like a fire that doesn’t give no f*ck. Chorus 2: I will be burning like that fire, I am so out of control, Please! try to put me out…you better stop, drop, and roll.... Roll, roll, roll, your windows down. That fire! This fire! It’ll burn down ya whole damn town. Ryanne Cloyd 05/22/2014 4:13 p.m.