So This Is Love...

[purevintage]

So This Is Love...

By Erin Ferrier

Twinkle my little star

I don't care how far you are

I can see you sparkle, I know you shine

I could never leave something so beautiful behind.

You are mine and I am yours

Perfection radiates from your pores

Like the diamonds in your eyes

A magnetism you can't disguise

We could stop the hands of time

Love stays youthful and in its prime.

It's uncontrollable, a powerful drug

Stops my heart with a simple hug.

Almost takes away my breath,

Leaving us together until death.

[Mazrocon]

So This Is Love...

By Erin Ferrier

Twinkle my little star

I don't care how far you are

I can see you sparkle, I know you shine

I could never leave something so beautiful behind

The above verse is my favorite! "I can see you sparkle, I can see you shine"... Makes me feel like no matter how gloomy (or far away) things seem right now you aren't giving up on finding your happiness

You are mine and I am yours

Perfection radiates from your pores

Like the diamonds in your eyes

A megnatism you can't disguise

Small typo... it's 'magnetism'... just thought it'd point it out

We could stop the hands of time

Love stays youthful and in its prime.

It's uncontrollable, a powerful drug

Stops my heart with a simple hug.

Almost takes away my breath,

Leaving us together until death.

No critiques here.. .it's all very nicely written... keep on writing!

P.S. If you get the chance mind checking out my latest post in Lyrics Critique called Seasons of Change?.... would be much appreciated!

~TIMOTHY~

[purevintage]

Thank you I changed the word! Lol. Thanx for the feedback, you're very kind

[jimharmon]

With a chorus and bridge would make a sweet song too!

Did you get my message about the poets thing?

[puroamericano10]

So This Is Love...

By Erin Ferrier

Twinkle my little star

I don't care how far you are

I can see you sparkle, I know you shine

I could never leave something so beautiful behind.

You are mine and I am yours

Perfection radiates from your pores

Like the diamonds in your eyes

A magnetism you can't disguise

This is where you get beautifully poetic.

A splendid mix of wording!

We could stop the hands of time

Love stays youthful and in its prime.

It's uncontrollable, a powerful drug

Stops my heart with a simple hug.

Almost takes away my breath,

Leaving us together until death.

Really great.

Very honouring.

You really give love a good name here

Regards,

Puro

[TapperMike]

Not all songs need bridges. This would be nice as an AABA form.

You are mine and I am yours

Perfection radiates from your pores

Like the diamonds in your eyes

A magnetism you can't disguise

This might work better if you lead to a point.

A magnetism you can't disguise

Like the diamonds in your eyes

Perfection radiates from your pores

You are mine and I am yours

[TapperMike]

I've been thinking of this one a good deal.

It would be nice to have the title enter into the lyrics at some point. Perhaps just mixing up the words.

So This Is Love

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[RodChandler]

You captured the feeling of love well. Love stays youthful and in it's prime... very nice line. It truly does I think. Good job.