What Happens In Vegas

[KennyChaffin]

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What Happens in Vegas

 

 

In my dream Las Vegas

was being shoved against

the mountains. At first

it was actually fun riding

the berm of a sand dune

as it slid across the desert

something like surfing

the Sahara.

 

As we approached the

mountains the turbulence

of the sand increased

a huge lake formed between

us and the tall buildings.

 

We struggled to stay on top

of the crest and not fall into the

flaming abyss that had opened below.

 

I somehow made my way

to the left and a path leading

away from the bottomless pit.

 

From there I saw the high-rollers

in the high-rise fighting

to escape. They were beating

against the blue translucent

plastic windows with anything

they could find. Some were

already screaming as they fell

towards the burning conflagration

below them. Others were bending

and bulging the plastic out. Vague

body shapes pushing outward

beating to escape what to them

must be hell -- only to fall free

into another. Panic and fear

can make us fly.

 

 

Kenny A. Chaffin – 1/3/2014

[KaGy]

Hi Kenny,

 

I like the topic and I enjoyed the excellent imagery, though I got confused; is the flaming abyss the lake and where did it come from.  Is the lake a water or sand lake.  I was drawn into the poem and then that area lost me.

'...make us fly' great!

 

Thank you for sharing.

KaGy

[KennyChaffin]

Thanks KaGy! glad you liked it....and to answer your question....yes.

[MPerry]

Hi Kenny

 

I love when words are used to the extreme...this is a pretty good example...used in the right hands..it gives the reader pause, time to think and comment about what they have read...but I think you might have stretched the word muscle a little beyond capacity, trying to figure out myself, are you equating Las Vegas as Hell on Earth?  that's what I am interpreting?....I want to know if I am way far off?...My suggestion would be to give the reader a point of reference or something they can grab on to so you don't lose them in all the detail?....just a thought...regards Mike