Lyrics Writing Challenge #18 - Go To Your Happy Place

[john]

 

 

 

Hi gang

 

Not a natural state of affairs for songwriters to be writing happy songs..... but this is your challenge!

 

You might do well to pick a song form, rhyme scheme etc that supports a happy song. That aside, it can be a good idea to write happy songs in specific relation to something.... for example,

 

• spring or summer
• going to a party or partying in general
• love
• overcoming odds
• memories

 

 

Whatever you choose to focus on, your challenge is to write the happiest of happy, joyous songs ever written. It might help to I magine it is to be used in a children’s movie or tv show, or an advertisement etc.

 

Have fun with this!

 

Cheers

 

John

 

@Timbre @Skin @DonnaMarilyn  @McnaughtonPark  @symphonious7  @Peggy @Mahesh  @Pahchisme Plaid  @Ray888 @ALOPRODUCTIONZ

@Rudi

@Lisa Gates @snabbu @Patty Lakamp

[Rudi]

I have tried today a couple of times, but the best I have come up with so far is

 

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

 

Its a dog reunited with its owner.

 

I have of course written to order before, but its never very good.

 

To work at my best:

I don't have real choice when I write lyrics. I have to accept the lyrics that want to be written.

Sometimes its embarrassing.

[ames1212]

Mickey and ME

Amy Abernathy

 

Big Ears, Big Hands,

Living in a wonderous Land,

Met him when i was eight,

At Disney's majical Place.

 

Chorus

Oh Mickey and me,

Filled with glee,

Together we are,

Happy, Happy, Happy,

In a land of majic,

Oh Mickey and me,

are happy, happy , happy.

 

Lots of fun, lot's of play,

An Amazing Holiday,

Took me to a Small World,

Introduced Minnie as his girl.

 

Chorus

 

Bridge,

Grown up or a child,

Dig in go wild,

It's the place to be,

When you want happy.

 

Chorus

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

When John Posted this, I thought of Disney World and How happy it makes kids. This would  be a Children's song, i thought it was light hearted annd fun. I liked this challenge, i realized I have bee stuck on Break up songs, so this was a fun challenge.

[ames1212]

22 hours ago, Rudi said:

I have tried today a couple of times, but the best I have come up with so far is

 

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

yap yap yap yap

 

Its a dog reunited with its owner.

 

I have of course written to order before, but its never very good.

 

To work at my best:

I don't have real choice when I write lyrics. I have to accept the lyrics that want to be written.

Sometimes its embarrassing.

I could see that being a fun song.  I thought of this; 

Yap yap Yap,

Bark Bark bark,

you've really won my heart,

 

Play Play play,

Sleep sleep sleep,

You're still sweet

 

 

 

I thought of a children's song, you can tie it into how people  love their pets. Just a sugestion.

amy

[Pahchisme Plaid]

Hah!  I want to do this!  It still may be a bit, though.  Sports again, makes for some crazy weekends and crazy evenings.  

[ames1212]

On 5/5/2018 at 10:07 PM, Pahchisme Plaid said:

Hah!  I want to do this!  It still may be a bit, though.  Sports again, makes for some crazy weekends and crazy evenings.  

That's a good topic, go for it!

[Pahchisme Plaid]

1 minute ago, ames1212 said:

That's a good topic, go for it!

I’ve got an idea I hope to revisit if I can get a few moments from all this craziness.  It’s on my iPod voice recorder because it came to me while in the car, so a stoplight recording of just a chorus so far which I recorded shortly after the challenge was posted—hardly remember it now (good thing I recorded it!). I just have to put my brain on chill for a while to transition from being on screech to get the flow going again.

[ames1212]

On 4/29/2018 at 9:48 AM, john said:

 

 

 

Hi gang

 

Not a natural state of affairs for songwriters to be writing happy songs..... but this is your challenge!

 

You might do well to pick a song form, rhyme scheme etc that supports a happy song. That aside, it can be a good idea to write happy songs in specific relation to something.... for example,

 

• spring or summer
• going to a party or partying in general
• love
• overcoming odds
• memories

 

 

Whatever you choose to focus on, your challenge is to write the happiest of happy, joyous songs ever written. It might help to I magine it is to be used in a children’s movie or tv show, or an advertisement etc.

 

Have fun with this!

 

Cheers

 

John

 

John

 

@Timbre @Skin @DonnaMarilyn  @McnaughtonPark  @symphonious7  @Peggy @Mahesh  @Pahchisme Plaid  @Ray888 @ALOPRODUCTIONZ

@Rudi

@Lisa Gates @snabbu @Patty Lakamp

New Drug called you

 

 

Feeling kind of drowsy

you're small really wows me,

Blue jeans , green t-shirt

Let me tell you I am hooked,

The way you talk, the way you walk,'

Gets me feeling kinf of high,

When thoughts of you come to mind.

 

Chorus

I'm addicted to a new drug,

a new drug called You,

it's feeling like I'm flying high in the sky.

It's a new drug called you.

I'm flying High when you're on my mind,

It's a new drug called you.

 

You're a big heart tough guy,

You know boy i don't lie,

Dark hair, Brown eyes,

addicted more than you realize

Looking forward to every day,

And what might come my way

 

chorus

 

bridge

Don't need Alchol, don't need pills,

Time with you I get my fill,

Don't need drugs like cocaine,

You're the only drug i want to take.

 

Chorus.

[ames1212]

10 minutes ago, Pahchisme Plaid said:

I’ve got an idea I hope to revisit if I can get a few moments from all this craziness.  It’s on my iPod voice recorder because it came to me while in the car, so a stoplight recording of just a chorus so far which I recorded shortly after the challenge was posted—hardly remember it now (good thing I recorded it!). I just have to put my brain on chill for a while to transition from being on screech to get the flow going again.

This is a good challenge, because we tend to go deepr instead of light hearted, but the most memorable songs are lighthearted and fun. So Go For it.

[ames1212]

2 minutes ago, ames1212 said:

New Drug called you

 

 

Feeling kind of drowsy

you're small really wows me,

Blue jeans , green t-shirt

Let me tell you I am hooked,

The way you talk, the way you walk,'

Gets me feeling kinf of high,

When thoughts of you come to mind.

 

Chorus

I'm addicted to a new drug,

a new drug called You,

it's feeling like I'm flying high in the sky.

It's a new drug called you.

I'm flying High when you're on my mind,

It's a new drug called you.

 

You're a big heart tough guy,

You know boy i don't lie,

Dark hair, Brown eyes,

addicted more than you realize

Looking forward to every day,

And what might come my way

 

chorus

 

bridge

Don't need Alchol, don't need pills,

Time with you I get my fill,

Don't need drugs like cocaine,

You're the only drug i want to take.

 

Chorus.

oops line two is your'e smile really wows me.

 

[Pahchisme Plaid]

Wow, Ames, first quick glance at your song, loving it!  I came to do a quick drop.  I'll be back. I'll get a better look at your song and possibly update mine.  This isn't the one that I had mentioned earlier that I had on my voice record.  Its a totally different one, but while I was doing some outdoor work, came to my mind, figured I'd better get it down before it left.  

 

Mine needs some work, but that's good, because I'm open to making changes.  Had to just get it on here.  Feels high heal kicking to me, maybe fiddle or banjo.   Here it is:

 

Closer Than A Brother

Lyrics by Kc Chad © 2018

 

I’ve got a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows my joys, He knows my struggles

He’s known me ‘fore I’s known my mother

Spittin' image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

He tells me go, sometimes I don’t

He insists, my heals turn lump

But you know, I know He’s right

Why resist and waste that time

 

By and by, He’ll set me right, Whoo-hoo

 

I’ve got a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows my joys, He knows my struggles

He’s known me ‘fore I’s known my mother

Spittin image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

Been deserted a time or two

Them’s are men, what can you do?

They ain’t God so count them free

Oh I got Him, Yeah! He’s got me!

 

Yee-hahh, free them up, same as me!

 

I’ve got a friend, I’ve got friend,

 

I’ve got a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows my joys, He knows my struggles

He’s known me ‘fore I’s known my mother

Spittin' image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

Jesus knows who I am

Sure as holes in palm of his hand

Arms stretched out

He holds me tight

And stays me through the darkest nights

 

He holds me tight,  holds me tight!

 

I’ve got a friend, Oh, I’ve got a friend, Oh

 

I’ve got a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows my joys, He knows my struggles

He’s known me ‘fore I’s known my mother

Spittin' image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

When times are dark

He spills His light

Its hard to conceive, but

they're blessed times

There are whispers and

Reminders

mental treats meant for me

Cause He knows who I am,

the simple things that meet my needs.

Somethings that may mean nothing

To someone else 'cause they’re taylored

taylored, sweetly taylored for me.

 

Hey you! Yes YOU!

 

Do you have a friend sticks closer than a brother,

Closer than brother, unlike any other?

 

Do you have a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows your joys, knows your struggles

known you ‘fore you knew your mother

Spittin' image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

If you do, then sing with me,

Sing it out most joyously,  ON THREE

 

One, two, three! Ohhhh

 

I’ve got a friend sticks closer than a brother

Knows my joys, He knows my struggles

He’s known me ‘fore I’s known my mother

Spittin' image o’ the One, known as Papa

 

Spitting' image o' the One, known as Papa.

 

 

 

(Got to go, but I'll be back!)

 

[ames1212]

I like that song alot, but there needs to be some grammar corrections on line 3 of verse one . Good message.

 

I wrote one the other night called one Day, about waking up to the sights you might see in heaven. I will post it, even though i wrote it three days ago. You might like it, is a happy song. 

[ames1212]

One Day

( Amy Abernathy 2018)

 

ll

 

One day after earth reigns, up in the sky,

There will be beauty never seen, look like a dream,

One day streets pathed in gold, will lead home.

There will be a crystal throne, by the jasper sea.

Chorus

One day I’ll Awake,

In a place where glory shines,

All troubles far behind ( me).

Angels will sing a wonderful song,

The king  will welcome me home.

VS.2

One day I’ll fly away to a place, up in heaven

There will be jewel stoned walls, with many halls.

One day standing before the king, I’ll be redeemed.

There will be a face to face, because I was saved.

 

 

 

 

Chorus

One Day I’ll awake,

In a place where glory Shines,

All troubles far behind ( me).

Angels will sing a wonderful song,

The king will welcome me home.

 

Bridge

 

I’ll Fall at the feet of jesus,

Will be clothed in white,

He’ll say you fought the good fight.

I will praise him, Angels will praise him,

All the day and all the night.

 

Chorus

[Pahchisme Plaid]

On 5/9/2018 at 12:33 PM, ames1212 said:

New Drug called you

 

 

Feeling kind of drowsy

you're small really wows me,

Blue jeans , green t-shirt

Let me tell you I am hooked,

The way you talk, the way you walk,'

Gets me feeling kinf of high,

When thoughts of you come to mind.

 

Chorus

I'm addicted to a new drug,

a new drug called You,

it's feeling like I'm flying high in the sky.

It's a new drug called you.

I'm flying High when you're on my mind,

It's a new drug called you.

 

You're a big heart tough guy,

You know boy i don't lie,

Dark hair, Brown eyes,

addicted more than you realize

Looking forward to every day,

And what might come my way

 

chorus

 

bridge

Don't need Alchol, don't need pills,

Time with you I get my fill,

Don't need drugs like cocaine,

You're the only drug i want to take.

 

Chorus.

I wondered if you tried woozy in your first line and decided to go with drowsy?

 

This feels up-tempo to me so, try on this: Blue Jeans, green tee (leave off shirt)

then try the last line as, “gets me feeling kind of high and leave off “when thoughts of you come to mind”.  To me that last line is already implied, so you can get away with it.  Just as an option to consider.  Not trying to rewrite, just hearing a rhythm in my head and what it suggests to me. You can do the same with your other verse for consistency since that last line isnt really relevant enough to be missed, and if you wanted, you could change your previous line to:  “shoot me up everyday”.

 

Just as a personal preference, I’d like to see your chorus slightly modified to say, 

 

“I’m addicted to a new drug

that drug is you

I’m feeling like I’m flying in the sky high on you

When you’re on my mind, I’m a kite scraping skies, high on you.

 

High on you, I think, gives your vocalist more space and vocal options to “hook” with a catchy melody.  Again, I’m presenting options based on what goes on in my head, not knowing if you have a rhythm or vocal ideas already developing.  Fun song!

 

[Pahchisme Plaid]

17 hours ago, ames1212 said:

One Day

( Amy Abernathy 2018)

 

ll

 

One day after earth reigns, up in the sky,

There will be beauty never seen, look like a dream,

One day streets pathed in gold, will lead home.

There will be a crystal throne, by the jasper sea.

Chorus

One day I’ll Awake,

In a place where glory shines,

All troubles far behind ( me).

Angels will sing a wonderful song,

The king  will welcome me home.

VS.2

One day I’ll fly away to a place, up in heaven

There will be jewel stoned walls, with many halls.

One day standing before the king, I’ll be redeemed.

There will be a face to face, because I was saved.

 

 

 

 

Chorus

One Day I’ll awake,

In a place where glory Shines,

All troubles far behind ( me).

Angels will sing a wonderful song,

The king will welcome me home.

 

Bridge

 

I’ll Fall at the feet of jesus,

Will be clothed in white,

He’ll say you fought the good fight.

I will praise him, Angels will praise him,

All the day and all the night.

 

Chorus

Ah!  Love it!  I know the passage this is derived from.  I have a song that I wrote a number of years ago called, “On His Throne”, very fun and upbeat that I just can’t seem to play on guitar without messing up, that’s based on those same visuals—however, still very different from yours.  Good endorphins abound for me when triggered with reminders of that passage!  If you have music to this, I’d love to hear it!

[Pahchisme Plaid]

17 hours ago, ames1212 said:

I like that song alot, but there needs to be some grammar corrections on line 3 of verse one . Good message.

 

I wrote one the other night called one Day, about waking up to the sights you might see in heaven. I will post it, even though i wrote it three days ago. You might like it, is a happy song. 

You mean I’s isn’t correct English? Yeah, I know.  I’s fix that.  😜

[Pahchisme Plaid]

Trying to decide if I should eliminate the bridge on my song....

[Glammerocity]

I want ice cream

I deserve ice cream

I should have ice cream

Buy me ice cream

 

I didn't stomp and scream

You so screamed at me

So I cleaned my room

It's shiny as can be

It should make you happy

Can't you see it gleam?

What'samatter you?

Where's my huh huh ice cream?

 

I want ice cream

I deserve ice cream

I should have ice cream

Buy me ice cream

 

What's behind your back?
What you hide from me?

Don't you make me guess

Show me, pretty please

Show me what you got

Don't you make me beg

Did you get me fro-yo

Ima bite your leg

 

You got me ice cream

I have a ice cream

You don't have ice cream

This is my ice cream

I love my ice cream

Say it again, ice cream

Happy place with ice cream

You can't have my ice cream

[scotsman89]

no idea where this came from took about 10 mins to write and it's a girl go figure. but the place that makes me happy where I can escape is the bathroom > in the bath soaking and thinking about nothing  luxury

 

john

 

 in the bathroom 

 

tonight I'm going to the bar
you know where I've got so far
it's the bathroom

 

where I shower the day off

mostly dirt and other stuff
in the bathroom

 

clothes off and shower on
step  in it  won't take long
in the bathroom

 

the bathroom
where I can escape
the noise and worry
that's all it takes

there's no hurry
step in lock the door
leave the world behind
who could ask for more 
in the bathroom
in the bathroom

 

turn off the water slowly
breath in and out wholly
in the bathroom

 

take a towel dry myself
get powder off the shelf
in the bathroom

 

all dry now put on my dress
the one I always liked best
in the bathroom

 

the bathroom
where I can escape
the noise and worry

that's all it takes

there's no hurry
step in lock the door
leave the world behind
who could ask for more 
in the bathroom
in the bathroom

 

step out in the hallway
my moms waiting there
she says I look pretty
am I going anywhere
just out and about I say
but I wish I could stay

in the bathroom

in the bathroom

 

[Glammerocity]

On 5/27/2018 at 3:10 PM, scotsman89 said:

no idea where this came from took about 10 mins to write and it's a girl go figure.

 

 

I actually read the lyric first and I thought it was about a transvestite, which took it somewhere else, like they feel safe in the bathroom, with it being kinda dangerous for them to venture out into the streets. Not that I thought you were a transvestite, John, but it was coming from a male place, I guess. I dunno. Having dressed in women's glam clothes onstage maybe I'm just more sensitive to it. Not a lot of lycra in the men's dept of Primark.